一篇題為《Computer games and our eyesight》的期中考試滿分英語作文在家長們的朋友圈中迅速傳播開來。下面是這篇滿分作文，你覺得元芳怎么樣？

寫作主題和要求：

write at least 60 words according to the given topic " computer games and our eyesight "

學(xué)生作文：

Computer games and our eyesight

how do students like playing computer games in your class？

is it good or bad for eyesight if they spend much time in the computer room？Why？

would you give your kind advice to them？

two-thirds of male students in our class like playing computer games very much。

though our teachers and their parents told them not to play games any more again and again。

I think it is bad for eyesight if they spend much time in the computer room。

be cause I have some experience by my self . I used to play them . then I had to put on my glasses .

so I advise you . give it up as soon as possible。

原文翻譯：

how do students like playing computer games in your class？

你們班學(xué)生玩電腦的情況怎么樣？

is it good or bad for eyesight if they spend much time in the computer room？Why？

如果他們在電腦室花費(fèi)太多時(shí)間，對視力是好是壞？

would you give your kind advice to them？

你能給他們一些建議嗎？

two-thirds of male students in our class like playing computer games very much。

我們班三分之二的男生非常喜歡玩電腦游戲。

though our teachers and their parents told them not to play games any more again and again。

雖然我的老師和父母一次又一次地告訴他們不要再玩游戲了。

I think it is bad for eyesight if they spend much time in the computer room。

我認(rèn)為他們在電腦室呆太久會(huì)影響他們的視力。

because I have some experience by my self . I used to play them。

因?yàn)槲乙呀?jīng)從自己的經(jīng)驗(yàn)中獲得了一些經(jīng)驗(yàn)。我以前經(jīng)常玩游戲。

Then I had to put on my glasses .

然后我戴上眼鏡。

so I advise you . give it up as soon as possible。

因此，我建議你盡快停止這種做法。

作文鑒賞：

這篇文章作者可以從自己的角度思考問題，意識到玩電腦游戲?qū)ψ约旱难劬τ袊?yán)重傷害，可以呼吁其他學(xué)生盡快放棄玩長期游戲的壞習(xí)慣。文章流暢，措辭恰當(dāng)。

那么這篇文章為什么能在家長的朋友圈上瘋狂傳播呢？

大概引起了很多父母的共識吧？

如果你是父母，你覺得這篇作文怎么樣？

為什么少尉當(dāng)時(shí)沒有這么高的覺悟？

50米外不分你我，

百米外的人和牲口不分……。

眼睛是心靈的窗戶。所以小偉呼吁童鞋們。

要適當(dāng)使用電腦、手機(jī)等電子設(shè)備。

避免引起近視，給以后的生活帶來各種不便。